Critique of "Charlton Heston"

I suppose I could critique his acting in "Planet of the Apes," but this story will have to do.

This is very clever. The use of a famous person from a time-gone-by as the main character. A cartoon eagle. Industrial Park Road. This is very much a story, and feels very much like a real story all the way until the end, when, in a matter of two sentences it unravels. I think. This is my judgment, and it could be wrong. The climax is cathartic and slow and both hilarious and tragic. Reminds me of the final scene from “Girl With Curious Hair.” About the unraveling. Maybe it’s the wrong word? I think, rather than unravel, what I mean is it cuts off, falls short. This is mimicked or represented in the text as Mr. Charlton Heston is ‘out of ideas’ after feeling very powerful. Was this all his imagination? I don’t think so.


Eddie is exactly as advertised: cartoonish, but with the edge that comes with being shown the shaft by those big wigs at the NRA and the T.V. stations. An adult swim edge, maybe. I think one thing to consider, or at least never forget, is that Eddie was created. Not only by you, the author, but in the world that this story takes place in, Eddie has a creator. Be it some creative loon at the NRA or a freelance animator, someone thought him up, drew him, gave him life. He obviously knows this…what does he think of it?  
I love—I’m impressed—the use of humor throughout. One-liners are placed well, and jokes are often set up and then followed through on. It’s nice to read an honest piece that doesn’t withhold from the reader those little satisfactions. (examples: ‘I’m a Simpson’s fan;’ ‘Charlton didn’t know a thing about trains;’ ‘Somebody get a vet’)


I question the use of the little dots. Are the scenes that the dots separate that different and unique to warrant their usage? You may say ‘Yes. Yes they are.’