Critique of “One Night: 750 words plus a few”

Very fast, this sprints running faster faster it catches up to itself, momentarily, and then off again it goes into distance. I believe, and I trust my belief, that author Ruby Rosa Brezinsky appears at least three times in the story. Is she the opening narrator? I believe the piece operates with the (potentially honest) reproduction of ‘real-life’ dialogue with authorial asides sprinkled throughout. Whether the dialogue is, in fact, transcribed from a real or factual event may be irrelevant. What is important, is that these are working for something or in some way. The dialogic nature of this piece gives fragmented snapshots into a world full of conflict and intrigue. Who’s getting who pregnant? What’s with all the drugs? I like that this does this. Rather than fully explicate each individual instance, we are given momentary life as it is: fragmented, unfulfilled, and full of thoughts and instances that end at their conception. How unlike anything else we normally read in fiction, right? The main question asked, is, why do we seek fulfillment in a moment or instance when there is none? Or, rather, why do we try to place or extrapolate meaning or order like that, when in fact there is only chaos?